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When she thinks of him, she thinks of tree branches:
spindly fingers spread out, stretching
in angles wide for handfuls of sky.

And she thinks of him.

She thinks of him digging his toes
into soft, damp sand,
wading in shallow depths before
being carried by crescents of the sea.

She thinks of him in a blur of curls, in the
warmth on her waist and the coolness on her lips,

pressing the memories and the maybes
like petals and leaves
to paper.

And she thinks of him.
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*imaginative-lioness Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this piece in my journal: [link]
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~smilewithlove Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the imagery is beautiful and touching
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^neurotype Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love how simply stated the images in this are.
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~TheRussianBurrito Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of a girl I recently dated over the Summer... Kinda miss it, but oh well.

Good job, I really like the repetition, and I like how you practically paint a picture. It's beautiful. :)
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Very sweet, pretty thing. I can taste salt in the air.
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=wdnest Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful - congrats on DD. Lovely expressive poem
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*0hgravity Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful.

The repetition works very well.
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*roadfullofpromise Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I can relate! <3
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=PikaChai-Tea Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great ;u; .May I ask what literature tag you used?
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Mood: Love ~WalkinginDreamlight Dec 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the way the imagery captures the reader in visualised verse that makes you want to come back and read the poem again and again.

I particularly liked:

"When she thinks of him, she thinks of tree branches:
spindly fingers spread out, stretching
in angles wide for handfuls of sky."

and

"pressing the memories and the maybes
like petals and leaves
to paper."

Quite a talent you have for visualised poetry.

Well done on the DD! :)
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